UCLA 합격!! 에세이로 승부봤어요! 에세이 공개!
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스티븐아카데미
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2026-08-19 20:08
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"조왕신에게 기도를 올리던 어머니의 정한수, 그리고 나의 이야기..."
SFS 졸업생 Veronica(가명) 학생의 UCLA 합격 스펙과 에세이 일부를 공개합니다.
✅ [학생 스펙 한눈에 보기]
• 출신교: SFS (Seoul Foreign School) 졸업
• GPA: 3.75 / 4.0
• SAT: 1460점
• IB: 38 / 45
(Chem HL, Korean Lang&Lit HL, Psy HL / Econ SL, English Lang&Lit SL, Math SL)
• AP: Chem 4점 / Calc BC 4점 / Econ Micro 4점 / Econ Macro 4점
▶ [합격 에세이 본문 중 (1/2)]
(※ 학생 요청으로 일부만 공개합니다)
▶ 학생 동의 받았습니다.
One of my earliest memories is of my mother pouring fresh water to the brim into a newly cleaned bowl after having done the dishes and bowing to it. She would bend at the waist mumbling inaudibly with hands pressed together at the palms. Even then, I think I was about five, it stuck in my mind as unusual: I remember being told to bow to grandfather, grandmother, or this or that grownup, but to a bowl of water? I now know her conviction was praying to the Jo-whang-shin, or the kitchen goddess of the fire and the hearth, kind of like Vesta in Western religions. I now know that this is a somewhat common rite among Korean women. Her practice has a great curiosity for me more than some text learning at school since it is so culturally exotic, even for Korea, but logically, it’s, well, a little spooky and weird. But, I realized, who am I to say that there is little truth in her beliefs? I always wondered though how my life would have been different if I had grown up in a “normal Christian home.”
I grew up thinking that praying to a still bowl of water was reasonable if one wanted good auspices of the Jo-whang-shin, although I was told by mother to be Buddhist in public, since it raises the fewest callous questions from people who don’t understand, even among Koreans. Strangely now even with all this occult background, I attend a very Christian school. Only then did I learn that my youth was a little non-standard. Truthfully though, are the distinctly different writing styles of the one Bible the direct voice of God? To me both seemed somewhat unreasonable, the praying to the Jo-whang-shin with an offering of a bowl of water or praying to food from God before we eat it.
Standing on the crosswalk alone in the night, waiting for the green light, I can sense the presence of the numerous people who busily passed through this crosswalk all day in this city of Seoul of millions. Only the lights on the street are there with me. [continued]
✅ 겉으로는 평범해 보이는 일상 속에서 한국의 전통 신앙(조왕신)과 기독교적 환경 사이의
문화적 정체성을 진솔하게 풀어낸 Veronica 학생의 에세이!
▶ 턱걸이 스펙이지만 스티븐허 원장 도움 에세이로 승부를 봤습니다!
▶ 스티븐허 원장과 함께 입시사정관을 감동시키는 에세이를 써봐요!
365일 전세계 어디서든 24시간 카톡 상담 가능!
▶ 중앙일보 미국입시 좌담회 (입시팁) - https://m.blog.naver.com/stevenacademy/224349244373
▶ 원서 풀패키지란? http://pf.kakao.com/_wGrYl/111070376
☎문의
미국 : 415-918-6018
한국 : 02-538-6018
공식홈페이지 : http://www.stevenacademy.co.kr/
VOD 12만9천원 무제한 수강 : https://onlinesteven.co.kr/
24시간 카톡 문의 http://pf.kakao.com/_wGrYl
SFS 졸업생 Veronica(가명) 학생의 UCLA 합격 스펙과 에세이 일부를 공개합니다.
✅ [학생 스펙 한눈에 보기]
• 출신교: SFS (Seoul Foreign School) 졸업
• GPA: 3.75 / 4.0
• SAT: 1460점
• IB: 38 / 45
(Chem HL, Korean Lang&Lit HL, Psy HL / Econ SL, English Lang&Lit SL, Math SL)
• AP: Chem 4점 / Calc BC 4점 / Econ Micro 4점 / Econ Macro 4점
▶ [합격 에세이 본문 중 (1/2)]
(※ 학생 요청으로 일부만 공개합니다)
▶ 학생 동의 받았습니다.
One of my earliest memories is of my mother pouring fresh water to the brim into a newly cleaned bowl after having done the dishes and bowing to it. She would bend at the waist mumbling inaudibly with hands pressed together at the palms. Even then, I think I was about five, it stuck in my mind as unusual: I remember being told to bow to grandfather, grandmother, or this or that grownup, but to a bowl of water? I now know her conviction was praying to the Jo-whang-shin, or the kitchen goddess of the fire and the hearth, kind of like Vesta in Western religions. I now know that this is a somewhat common rite among Korean women. Her practice has a great curiosity for me more than some text learning at school since it is so culturally exotic, even for Korea, but logically, it’s, well, a little spooky and weird. But, I realized, who am I to say that there is little truth in her beliefs? I always wondered though how my life would have been different if I had grown up in a “normal Christian home.”
I grew up thinking that praying to a still bowl of water was reasonable if one wanted good auspices of the Jo-whang-shin, although I was told by mother to be Buddhist in public, since it raises the fewest callous questions from people who don’t understand, even among Koreans. Strangely now even with all this occult background, I attend a very Christian school. Only then did I learn that my youth was a little non-standard. Truthfully though, are the distinctly different writing styles of the one Bible the direct voice of God? To me both seemed somewhat unreasonable, the praying to the Jo-whang-shin with an offering of a bowl of water or praying to food from God before we eat it.
Standing on the crosswalk alone in the night, waiting for the green light, I can sense the presence of the numerous people who busily passed through this crosswalk all day in this city of Seoul of millions. Only the lights on the street are there with me. [continued]
✅ 겉으로는 평범해 보이는 일상 속에서 한국의 전통 신앙(조왕신)과 기독교적 환경 사이의
문화적 정체성을 진솔하게 풀어낸 Veronica 학생의 에세이!
▶ 턱걸이 스펙이지만 스티븐허 원장 도움 에세이로 승부를 봤습니다!
▶ 스티븐허 원장과 함께 입시사정관을 감동시키는 에세이를 써봐요!
365일 전세계 어디서든 24시간 카톡 상담 가능!
▶ 중앙일보 미국입시 좌담회 (입시팁) - https://m.blog.naver.com/stevenacademy/224349244373
▶ 원서 풀패키지란? http://pf.kakao.com/_wGrYl/111070376
☎문의
미국 : 415-918-6018
한국 : 02-538-6018
공식홈페이지 : http://www.stevenacademy.co.kr/
VOD 12만9천원 무제한 수강 : https://onlinesteven.co.kr/
24시간 카톡 문의 http://pf.kakao.com/_wGrYl
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